The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the current layout of a tiny town, Islip, and how
this
town is undergoing development.
Overall
,
this
town will be urbanized, more attracting families to live there.
Firstly
, it is notable that the main road will be used only for pedestrians.
Instead
, a dual carriageway is supposed to be constructed, allowing vehicles access to the accommodations surrounded by the road. To the north of the
area
, an urban
area
and a row of shops will be converted into more infrastructures
such
as a bus station, shopping centre, car park, and new housing. Meanwhile, at the centre of
this
area
, little change can be seen with shops in a line remaining in place. In the southern part, the park will be reduced in size,
while
new housing will be built in the
area
occupied by the previous park. Within a dual carriageway, there are lots of developments with facilities and new residential housing,
whereas
a school and housing still exist outside of the way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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