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The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008.

The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008.
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The bar chart provides information about the statistics for tourists from various parts of the world visiting country X.
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, the table illustrates the income of different companies in the country in 2019 and 2020.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all nations witnessed a downward trend and the lowest was seen in the US and Canada over the period.
Furthermore
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, the lowest recorded in the transportation and Travel Agents in 2007 and 2008. the date of foreign tourists stood at nearly 2200
thousand
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individuals
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 in 2007,
then
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 it decreased rapidly to 1000
thousand
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individuals
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 in 2008. The US and Canada stood at 2300
thousand
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individuals
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 in 2007, and
this
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 was followed by a rocket decline to 200
thousand
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individuals
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 over 1 year. China and Japan stood at 3000
thousand
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individuals
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 in 2007,
then
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 went down to 2100
thousand
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individuals
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 in 2008. In 2007, Australia stood at 2990
thousand
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individuals
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, after which people significantly decreased in 2008. It can be seen in the table, that the statistic for income in hotels and resorts stood at 3,5
million
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dollars
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 in 2019, which point the figure started to fall rapidly to 0,5
million
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dollars
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 in 2020.
Next,
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Restaurants, bars, and souvenir shops stood at 2,4
million
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dollars
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 in 2019,
then
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 went down slowly to 1,2
million
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dollars
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. In 2019, transportation and travel agents stood at 1,3
million
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dollars
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 and decreased to 0,4
million
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dollars
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 in 2020. Tour guides, small vendors, and other services stood at 1,4
million
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dollars
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 in 2019, and
this
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 was followed by a sharp decline to 1,1
million
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dollars
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 in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand, individuals, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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