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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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The bar chart below illustrates the proportion among different
age
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 groups on food and drink,restaurants and hotels, the
last
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 one is for entertainment in the United Kingdom in 2004
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, we can see that despite the
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 group, buying food and drinks are the most useful items in
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 graphic. The absolutely different trend we can notice if we look to stay at restaurants and hotels. Teenagers or
people
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 who are under 30, prefer to spend their time in restaurants and hotels.
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 only slightly more than 5% of them bought food and drink.
People
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 with the
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 range 31-45 liked to buy a meal more than the other two. More precisely the percentage of them
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being in the hotel and doing entertainment are approximately 13% and 7% respectively. Almost the same situation we can see with
people
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, which had aged between 46 and 60. But
people
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 who were older than 61, almost did not like to stay at a hotel or have a meal at a restaurant. Exactly 20% of them like to buy a dish.
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, old
people
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 with
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 between 61 and 75 like to do entertainment as twice, as old
people
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 older than 76 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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