There is a trend of increasing amounts of consumer goods, which leads to environmental problems. What are the reasons for this trend? Give your own opinion and solutions.

An increasing number of population ,
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ultimately increase the consumption of goods
due to
which people are facing several environmental issues. There are
numeruos
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numerous
reason
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reasons
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behind
this
trends
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trend
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. The essay will
disscuss
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discuss
both reasons and
solution
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in upcoming paragraphs. one of the most prominent
reason
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reasons
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for
this
phenomenon
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the advertisement .People come to know about the newly
lauched
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launched
product
due to
advertisement
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advertisements
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, which indirectly
force
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them to buy
that products
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that product
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by telling them the numerous
benifits
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benefits
of the products available at
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low price in the market.
Additionlly
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,
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most of the items in
market
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the market
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are packed in plastic .
For instance
,
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a number
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of drinks in the market are available in plastic bottles ,which are thrown by
consumer
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consumers
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after
the
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use
. Sometimes they try to burn these bottles
instead
of reusing them ,which leads to
cause
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air pollution .
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the other hand ,there are several ways to get out of
this
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issue
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.
Firstly
,people need to
use
the phenomenon of three Rs
that is
reuse,recycle and reduce. Whenever they
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go
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shopping, they have to take their bags with them to put their stuff in it.
Along with
this
, they can
also
use
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plastics
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plastic
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bottles to fill water for them
instead
of doing garbage . Which will automatically help them to save their money.
According to
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my view points increasing
consumtion
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consumption
of goods leads to
increase
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increased
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environmental problems which indirectly cause
varios
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various
health issues to the public .Plastic
use
is not good at all,
some time
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sometimes
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dirctly
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directly
or
indireclty
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indirectly
.
To sum up
, there are numerous reasons behind
this
trend, there are still some
pervention
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interventions
that can be taken to solve
these kind
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of big problems.
Single
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step by every single individual will prove
fruitfull
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fruitful
for them
as well as
for their environment.
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