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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictures
shows
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show
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 how the arrangement of a central
library
 has changed from 20 years ago to now.
Overall
, the division of the floor has not changed so much.
On the other hand
, there have been major differences in the location of contents. the number of doors, and so on.
On
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In
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 the
center
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centre
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 of
library
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the library
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, there
have been
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were
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 tables & chairs, but they have
removed
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been removed
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 today.
Moveaver
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Moreover
, new
infromationdesk
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information desk
 put on the middle right of the institution. On the upper right of
library
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the library
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, the area of children's books has been diminished, and there are only children's fiction
boods
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books
 now. The number of doors has been
incleased
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increased
 from 3 to 4. On the right side of
entrance
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the entrance
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,
new
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a new
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 room has been built, so that
new
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a new
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 door has
equiped
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equipped
. 20 years ago, There were no self-service machines,
however
, today's
library
 has 3 machines.
In contrast
, there are the areas which have not changed.
For example
,
entrance
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the entrance
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 has been located
on
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in
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 the same position as 20 years ago.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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