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The chart illustrates internet usage among a country's population given by age group in 2010 and 2017

The chart illustrates internet usage among a country's population given by age group in 2010 and 2017
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The graph shows the internet that has been used among
country's
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the country's
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 population given by the
group
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 in the
year
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 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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,
population
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the population
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 among 16
a-24
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to a-24
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 increased, and groups of 25-34
also
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 increased in the
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year
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years
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 2010 and 2017. More importantly, groups 55-64 and 65-74 decreased in both years. In the
year
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 2010, the highest percentage was with the
group
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 16-24 around 90 per
cent
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, and the
group
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 25-34 with over 80 per
cent
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.
Following
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this
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, the lowest per
cent
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 was with
group
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 55-64 age
group
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,
ang
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and
 the
group
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 64-74 had less than 20 per
cent
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in
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apply
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this
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year
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.
The
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In the
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year
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 2017, the highest per
cent
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 age
group
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 was 16-24 with nearly 100 per
cent
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, and
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group
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the group
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 35-44 with less than 100 per
cent
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.
After
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this
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,
35
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the 35
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-44 age
group
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that
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apply
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presented nearly 90 per
cent
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.
Finally
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,
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group
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groups
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 45-54
that
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apply
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presented 80 per
cent
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, year, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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