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The chart shows the percentage of full-time undergraduate students at universities in three cities by subject area. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the most important features and making comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of full-time undergraduate students at universities in three cities by subject area. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the most important features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the data about the percentage of regular
excercising
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exercise
 in Australia across different
aged
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 groups between
men
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 and
women
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 in 2010.
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Overall
, Across almost all ages,
women
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 consistently showed higher proportions compared to the
men
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,
whereas
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men
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 only had
higher
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percetage
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percentage
percentages
 in
15~24
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the 15~24
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 aged
group
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 than the other
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. In the 15 to 24
age
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group
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,
men
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 had a higher percentage of regular physical activity than
women
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, with 52.8% compared to 47.7%.
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, starting from the 25 to 34
age
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group
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, the trend reversed, as
women
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 surpassed
men
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 with 48.9% to 42.2%. In the older
age
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 groups, the gap between
men
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 and
women
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 became more pronounced.
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, in the 35 to 44
age
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group
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, 52.5% of
women
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 participated in regular activity compared to only 39.5% of
men
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.
This
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 pattern remained consistent in the 55 to 64
age
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group
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, where 53.3% of
women
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 exercised regularly,
while
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 only 45.1% of
men
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 did the same.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, group, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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