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In the past, mos . t people used to travel to their place of work. With increased f Before answering the question, remember: computers the mternet and smart h use o from hom:. P ones, more and more people are starting to work What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas know/ d d with examples and relevant elddence. e ge an expenence, and support your arguments Write at least 250 word s.

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These days, the number of people who decide to
work
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 at home
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 of going to
office
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the office
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,
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technology
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 improvement, is increasing. There will be many
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 for persons. In
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essay
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 I will discuss both positive and negative aspects of
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 subject. One of the main
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to
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of working
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work
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 as
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influencer
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 is you can save much time and
improving
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 efficiency.
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, they do not need to go out
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 it can assist
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in decreasing
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traffics
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 and solve
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problem
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 either. Another great advantage of working from home is that
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influencer
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influencers
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 can spend more time with their family and their family would not feel
lack
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a lack
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 of their existence.
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, if their family require them for
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the necessary
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 situation, they
able
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 to reschedule their plans and help
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their families.
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, there are
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 many
disadvantages
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 to
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work
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 far from
office
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the office
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 and
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work place
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workplace
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, the most significant disadvantage is,
it
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that it
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 can
be caused
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cause
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 many health issues,
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, because of lack of mobility the
influencer
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 can be more obese and gain extremely weight,
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,
this
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problem
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 can cause heart attack and more vital health
problem
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. Another enormous
problem
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 is having poor quality internet, if the internet has low quality, it can affect
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the latency and accuracy of
influencer
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 works. In conclusion, as can be seen from the points made in
this
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 essay, there are both
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 to working from home
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 of office. Whilst there are many
advantages
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 to
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, a substantial negative impact would
me
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be
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 health problems and issues,
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however
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however,
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 I feel that
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 the
advantages
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 would outweigh the
disadvantages
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.
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organization
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs to enhance coherence. For example, use more transitional words and phrases to link ideas smoothly.
examples
Refine the examples to be more specific and directly related to the topic of working from home. Avoid generalities about influencers, and focus on broader examples of remote work.
ideas
Expand on the explanations of how technology specifically aids in remote work. This could include mentioning tools like video conferencing, project management software, and instant messaging.
grammar
Correct minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, 'The essay provides a clear structure' could be 'The essay is clearly structured.'
focus
Ensure every point made is directly tied back to the core topic of working from home due to technological advancements. Avoid losing focus on the main subject.
organization
The essay provides a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
ideas
The writer discusses both advantages and disadvantages, providing a balanced view.
examples
Relevant examples are given, such as time-saving and spending more time with family.
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