You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
the graphs illustrate the difference in the
employment
rate
in four countries between men and
women
in the range of age 60 and 64 within two accounted years: 1970 and 2000.
Overall
,
while
in the 1970s, there was little difference in the
employment
rates in the four countries in the men
sector
but more fluctuation in the
women
sector
, in the 2000s, the male
sector
had
also
witness a fluctuation occurred mainly by a significant dwindling of the
employment
rate
.
Firstly
, in the man
sector
, Japan had the highest
employment
rate
in 1997 with 84%, more than 10%, 5% and 11% than Austarlia,
Belgium
and the US, respectively. The same occured with the Japanese
women
's
employment
rate
of 43%, but the difference was more significant: more than 35% and 25% in Australia and
Belgium
, respectively.
Nevertheless
,
while
such
trends still occurred in the
women
sector
in 2000 - with Australia and the US increasing by 1% and 2%, and Japan and
Belgium
decreasing by 3% and 1% - the men's
sector
in 2000 had decreased significantly: a lost of 80% and 33% in
Belgium
and Australia, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.

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