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The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The pie charts illustrate the difference in contributing money of
British
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the British
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 population to
food
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,
cars
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, petrol, restaurants, furniture, computers and books from 1971 to 2001.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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food
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 and
cars
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 were the most spending in both years given. Noticeably, books
was
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were
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 the least contributing in 2001.
To begin
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 with, in 1971, 44% of spending was
seen
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spent
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in
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on
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food
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, which was the biggest, followed by
cars
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 with 22% .In 2001, spending on
food
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 decreased dramatically to 14% ,
conversly
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conversely
,
percentage
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the percentage
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money
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of money
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spended
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spent
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 on
cars
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 increased significantly to 43%.  In terms of petrol,
furniture
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and furniture
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, a decrease in
speding
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spending
speeding
 was
witneesed
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witnessed
, which was 10% and 9% respectively in 1971,
then
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 falling to 8% in both categories in 2001.
Conversly
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Conversely
, spending money on restaurants and computers increased sharply to 14% and 12% respectively in 2001 from only 7% and 2% respectively in 1971 . The
last
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 category books, there was 6% in 1971,
then
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 dropping to only 1% in 2001, which was the lowest spending.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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