Some people believe the purpose of education is to make people useful to society. Others believe it is to prepare them to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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believe that the purpose of education is to make people useful to their community see that

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education helps to prepare

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children to develop the society

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they believe that the study materials force the students to think in ways to make them create new ideas

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in order to raise the quality of their society.

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in their lives. And that scientific materials like maths and chemistry

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minds to new and effective ideas. In the end, I partly agree with the first opinion, Because education helps a lot in developing

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society and it

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helps in the success of individuals as well.

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task achievement

Ensure that all points are elaborated upon with relevant and specific examples to firmly support your stance.

coherence cohesion

Try to make your connections between sentences and paragraphs smoother to enhance readability. For example, instead of 'However, On the other side,' consider 'On the other hand, those who believe...'

task achievement

You have provided a balanced view by mentioning both perspectives regarding the purpose of education.

coherence cohesion

Your essay has a clear introduction and a concluding statement, which ties together your discussion in a succinct manner.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

133 words

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Some people believe the purpose of education is to make people useful to society. Others believe it is to prepare them to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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