More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

There is no denying the fact that people who want a good
life
will choose a city to live in.
This
essay will discuss how it is hard to live in a city and how can governments make the best experience for those who want to live in
cities
.
To begin
with, there are many reasons for
difficulty
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the difficulty
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of living in
cities
.
Firstly
, the cost of starting a new
life
is very high and hard.
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, you need to pay tons of money just to live in a small apartment or eat good food.
In addition
, it is not easy to make friends there.
For example
, if you were in a village you would make a lot of friends easily but, in big
cities
like New York, it is almost impossible to find a nice person like you. In terms of how the governments will try to make
the
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life
better for people, they will need a lot of time for it. It is
also
possible to say that the leaders need to find the reasons why people find it difficult to live
in
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also
they need to lower the prices more,
not
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everyone can afford the same money.
Moreover
,
the
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transportation is not easy in big
cities
.
For instance
,
government
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the government
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needs to afford everybody a ticket for the trains
everyday
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so they can
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continue
their
life
easily. In conclusion, there are many reasons
life
will be difficult because of it so you need to be careful. It is
also
true that the governments will make
life
easier if they afford everyone a ticket for the train.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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