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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given layout depicts the shifts of the Porth Harbour in 2000 compared to the current state. In general, the place experienced significant changes including relocation and renovation of some infrastructure. In terms of the west side, the showers and toilets on the top-left and both two of the car parks remained unchanged.
In addition
, the new showers and toilets were built opposite the Marina - which replaced the fishing boats in 2000.
Moreover
, a newly constructed dock was placed on the right side of the original one, linked to the fishing boats. Turning to the east side of the diagram, the public beach and passenger ferries remained unchanged during the given time. Regarding the bottom-right of the map, the public beach was turned into a private one owned by a hotel - which replaced the abandoned castle.
In addition
, some cafes & shops were erected close to the lifeboat and the road.
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task achievement
Develop more specific comparisons and details between the two time periods to enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of the response.
task achievement
Ensure all key features are covered to provide a clearer, fuller picture of the harbour's transformation.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph transitions for smoother reading; consider linking changes on the west side and the east side more cohesively.
coherence cohesion
Enhance logical structure by providing a clearer distinction between unchanged and newly added elements.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets the context and topic of the essay.
logical structure
The essay is logically divided into paragraphs discussing different areas of the harbour.
supported main points
Main points regarding changes and unchanged features are generally clearly identified.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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