The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The flowchart illustrates the procedure for producing
sugar
from one specific type of crop.
It is clear that
there are seven steps in the production of
sugar
from its starting materials.
This
process begins with cultivating
sugar
cane and concludes with the removal of moisture and cooling of the
sugar
. In the first stage,
sugar
canes are grown, and after 12 to 18 months, they are harvested either by hand or by machine. The collected crops are transferred to a specialised piece of equipment where they are crushed into juice. In the following stage, the crushed liquid is transported to a limestone filter; after which it is purified using
this
device. Once the juice is processed, the purified liquid is transported to an evaporator where moisture is removed from the juice through heating, converting it into syrup.
Subsequently
, the syrup is moved to a centrifuge where
sugar
crystals are separated. In the
last
step, the separated crystals are dried and cooled to produce the final product, which is
sugar
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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