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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
The graph provides data on the manufacture
levels
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 of certain fuels,
such
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 as
petroleum
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, natural
gas
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 and coal in the UK from 1981 to 2000. The energy units are measured in numbers. One energy unit refers to one million tonnes of oil.
Overall
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 the graph shows increases and decreases in
production
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levels
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.
Petroleum
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 and Coal increase and decrease in entirely separate directions, whole natural
gas
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 shows no signs of growth. in 1981
petroleum
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 had an increase in
production
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levels
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, the graph shows a decrease until 1991, it wasn't until 1992 that
petroleum
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 went back to
it's
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its
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 original growth.
On the other hand
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, natural
gas
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 had a slow
production
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 rate but started to increase steadily in 1998.
However
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, Coal had a large drop in
production
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 rates and remained lower than its original measured
production
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 level. Coal and natural
gas
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 remain less popular than
petroleum
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. Making
petroleum
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production
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levels
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 a preferred option.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, petroleum, gas, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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