Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is an ongoing debate that in the upcoming decades, environmental troubles will
go
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worse. It means that we are unable to survive on the
earth
. For survival,
the
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human beings will have to find another
planet
that can provide facilities
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human
life
. I firmly disagree with
this
opinion, because other
planets
are extremely hot or
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cold. Basic
life
necessities are still limited
at
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other
planets
. So,
instead
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try to make the
earth
a better place to live rather than
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to a different
planet
. First and foremost,
Earth
have
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all the basic needs of
life
such
as water, air and oxygen which can not be found on any other
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.
Additionally
,
Earth
have
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moderate
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temperature,
while
other
planets
are extensively hot or cold. Humans can not
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live at these degrees.
For example
, Mercury
are
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extremely hot. Human
life
can easily burn there.
On the other hand
, Neptune
are
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deadly cold.
As a result
, people will freeze there.
Furthermore
, some
planets
are like
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, because there is no source of water there. So, the chances of human survival are impossible
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other
planets
.
Secondly
, no doubt technology is increasing day by day, but human beings are still not economically stable to shift to another
planet
. Nowadays, it can be clearly seen that
,
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a lot of money is required to build a one space rocket.
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, in 2004,
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construct
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a space rocket
of
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about $150,000 which still
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due to
some minor technical glitch. So, from my perspective, it is not possible to build billions of space rockets for shifting to another
planet
.
Instead
, focus on making
earth
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a better place to live, In Conclusion,
life
on another
planet
could
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not be possible in any way, because of major factors like temperature, water and air. Another reason is that the technology is not still advanced for moving to another
planet
.
Finally
, making
earth
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a better place to live is the only viable solution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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