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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two line graphs provided compare the different electrical appliances that are owned, and
also
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 the number of
hours
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 dedicated to houseworking for 99
years
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.
Overall
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, it is apparent that after a significant rise in the level of
vacuum
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cleaners
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 and refrigerators in each household, they remained constant for the rest of the period.
Also
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, throughout the period, the number of
hours
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 individuals do housework is falling gradually. Turning to electrical appliances, it can be seen that the percentage of washing machines and
vacuum
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cleaners
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 in each house stood at 30% and 40% respectively in 1920.
Nonetheless
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,
this
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 level for
vacuum
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cleaners
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 was almost 1% of households in that year.
However
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,
this
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 saw a dramatic growth to 100% in the following 60
years
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 in 1980, the highest level in comparison with the other two appliances. For the following 39
years
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, the percentage of households with
vacuum
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cleaners
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 and refrigerators with a very close gap levelled off from 1980 to 2019. The amount of
hours
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 spent on doing housework in the second line graph is illustrated, measured per
week
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. It can be seen that
this
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 amount stood at 50
hours
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 per
week
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 in 1920, and
then
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 it experienced a gradual decline to approximately 15
hours
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 per
week
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 in 1980. For the following 39
years
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, it remained stable, and it can be understood that individuals spent less time on housework per
week
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 than before in 2019.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, years, vacuum, cleaners, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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