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The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.

The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.
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The graphs show the amount of CO2
emissions
of
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by
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 each person in four countries,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal. At first glance,
it is clear that
 the difference
among
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in
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 the number of CO2
emissions
 decreased steadily from 1967 to 2007.
To begin
, people who
lives
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live
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 in United
Staes
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States
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 emitted CO2 much higher than people who
lives
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live
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 in other countries. It still remained the highest
figure
 in 2007,
however
, it was lower than that of 1967.
A number
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Number
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 of
Swedish's
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Swedish
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emission
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emissions
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 was almost
get
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apply
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close to
American's
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America's
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emission
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emissions
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, but it dropped by about 7 metric tonnes
that
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which
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 was close to
figure
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the figure
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 of Italy. The
figure
of
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for
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 Italy
was shown
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showed
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overall
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an overall
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 increase, and it was higher than the
figure
of
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for
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 Sweden in 2007. The amount of Portugal people's
emission
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emissions
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 kept rising
similarly
, but it remained almost
same
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the same
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 result
with
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as
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 Sweden. Swedish reached a peak of their CO2
emissions
 in 1977, but their amount of CO2
emissions
 was halved
at the end
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, emissions, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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