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The table provides information the reasons of people using the car in city, and the pie chart shows the percentage of transport namely car, LRT(Light Rail Transit), bus and taxi.

The table provides information the reasons of people using the car in city, and the pie chart shows the percentage of transport namely car, LRT(Light Rail Transit), bus and taxi.
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The supplied pie chart indicates how many transportation
vehicles
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such
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 as
car
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,
LRT
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LRTs
,
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bus
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buses
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 and
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taxi
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taxis
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. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest number of
transports
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transport
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 is
car
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.
However
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, individuals do not prefer to use
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bus
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buses
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 and
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taxi
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taxis
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 which are the lowest
percentage
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 of
transport
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 systems over the period. Just under
a
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half (45%) of
transport
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 systems account for
car
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cars
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 in some areas. (Which is the highest
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 of
transport
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machine
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machines
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 over the period).
Moreover
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, the
percentage
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 of
transport
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vehicles
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 for LRT (Light Rail Transit) is roughly a third at 35% in cities.
In contrast
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, using
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bus
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buses
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 and
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taxi
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taxis
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 is not as popular as other
vehicles
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 and the
percentage
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 of using
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bus
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buses
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 is completely the same as
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taxi
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taxis
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.
That is
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 to say, only 10% of
transport
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 is comprised
to
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of
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bus
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 and
taxi
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 in some regions. (Which are the lowest
percentage
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 of
transport
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vehicles
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 over the whole year).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, bus, taxi, percentage, transport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban mobility
  • societal inclination
  • personal space
  • scheduling freedom
  • cost-efficiency
  • public transport systems
  • convenience
  • time-efficiency
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainable urban planning
  • mobility challenges
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