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Writing Task 1: # 61. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

Writing Task 1: # 61. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
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The table chart
iluustrates
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illustrates
 the details of
change
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the change
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of
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transportation modes in England over 15 years starting from 1985.The major
down ward
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downward
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 trend shows on long routes and taxis.
Athough
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,
folks
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folks'
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 interest increased in personal vehicles,
train
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trains
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 and other modes. The most effective and famous
method
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methods
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was
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were
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 car, local busand and long route busses.
However
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cars
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 number increased rapidly starting from 3199 in 1985 and reachead at near about 5000 in 2000.
Furthermore
, folks
also
 used Bicycle ,local
bus
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buses
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 and
by walk
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walked
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 but the numbers
were
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went down
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 41,274 and 237 respectively in 2000. They loved the train method and the number jumped from 289 to 366
at the end
 of
given
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a given
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 period. On the other side , Taxi
a other modes
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other modes
an other mode
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 followed
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upword
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upward
 trend starting from 13 and 450 in 1985
reached
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at
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42 and 585 in 2000 respectively. The comparison shows that individuals
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are interest
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interest
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interested
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toward
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in
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 public transport rather than walking.
Moreover
,
car
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cars
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 become more famous
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