You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second

chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The charts illustrate the proportion of Australian household
energy
utilization and
gas
emission
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produced by it.
Overall
, it is evident that Australian households mainly use heating
energy
and
gas
emission
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emissions
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dominantly come from water heating. There is no positive correlation
of
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energy
use and the
gas
emission
create
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. Regarding
to
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the first chart, there is 42% of heating
energy
used by Australian
household
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households
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, making it
as
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the dominant consumption.
Following
this
, 30% of the communities utilize
water heating
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water-heating
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energy
.
While
other
appliances
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usage is 15%, refrigeration utilization is only half of it (7%).
In contrast
, the consumption of lighting and cooling
energy
shows only 4% and 2%, respectively. Moving to the second chart, the largest
gas
emission
is generated from water heating, accounting for 32% of total output. Other appliances'
gas
production follows with 28% of
total
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proportion.
Then
, heating and refrigeration have a similar rate of
emission
creation, which are 15% and 14% respectively.
While
lighting contributes to 8% of total
gas
emission
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, cooling exhibits the least
emission
contribution with only 3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, emission with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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