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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts how the correlation between
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numbers
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number
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 of crimes committed
vary
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 with
ages
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. Meanwhile, the pie chart displays the distribution of illegal acts as recorded
one-year
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 ago.
Overall
, it is immediately apparent that millennials have recorded the peak number of crimes.Violent crime tends to be their
favourites
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.
To begin
 with, children between the ages of 0 and 8 years old have shown zero crime
rate
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.The proportion of illegal acts has exemplified a steady increase
by
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 4000.
Moreover
, the number has skyrocketed among
highschoolers
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 from 4000 to 70000, which differs by 64000.The numbers continued to surge until reaching the
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peak at 80000.The violation rate has exhibited a sudden dip for the civilians in their 20s,30s and 40s.The rates levelled off among the senior citizens. Other than that, violators are more inclined to commit violent crimes which is at 46%.
In addition
, the runner-up for the unlawful act they execute is stolen property amounted to 23%.
Nevertheless
,there is just over
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% difference with illegal drug syndicates (22%). The least popular offence is the one that involves public order.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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