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It’s generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent.However,it’s sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to becomea good sports person or artist. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every person has
its
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 own special
talent
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 and not all are good at the same things. Some
people
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 believe that a natural, birth-given
talent
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 is needed to become a good athlete or artist,
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 other
people
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 argue, that every child can learn a sport or art and even bring it to a high-performance
level
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.
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 essay will discuss both sides of
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 issue and provide my own opinion by way of conclusion. On one hand, it is not denied, that there are some
people
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 with natural special abilities other
people
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 have not. Because they have a kind of birth-given feeling for a sport or a
talent
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 to create great paintings, it is easier for them to even get better in those fields. During their
training
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training,
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 they already start from a higher point than others without that
talent
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 and can achieve better and higher performances much faster and with lower effort than someone without
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 ability.
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, even without
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 a special
talent
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 you can achieve a high-performance
level
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 in sports or art with enough training and experience. As training and motivation
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an important
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 in becoming a good sports athlete or painter, you can sometimes reach the same
level
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 with enough effort as someone with a special
talent
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 and even get better, because you work harder for your goal than someone who knows, that he is good in what he does. In summary, there are some arguments underlining that
people
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 with special talents reach high-performance levels faster because it is much easier for them to learn that, there are
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 some points, why
people
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 without special
talens
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talents
 can
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 reach the same
level
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 of performance.
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, I believe that even without a special
talent
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 it is possible to become a good artist or athlete if you really want that and invest enough effort to get better.

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To improve your task achievement score, try to incorporate more specific examples to bolster your points. This will make your arguments stronger and more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your main points are thoroughly supported. While you have good ideas, adding more evidence and examples would strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You have successfully responded to the task by discussing both views and providing your own opinion.
task achievement
The language is appropriate, and there is a clear attempt to present well-rounded arguments on both sides of the issue.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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