Many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. The experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education. Discuss both sides of this argument, to what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, more people agree that becoming acquainted with non-academic life offers advantages to those entering higher education.
Subsequently
, numerous young individuals decide to take a Linking Words
gap
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year
between graduation and enrolling in a university program, acquiring experience or Use synonyms
traveling
. Change the spelling
travelling
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essay will discuss the complete agreement I have with Linking Words
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viewpoint and the benefits of taking a Linking Words
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off.
There are several benefits to taking a Use synonyms
gap
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year
. The primary reason is that it allows students to study a major they Use synonyms
favor
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favour
while
spending time understanding themselves. A significant number of young academics– particularly in Thailand–do not have a clear idea of their future career aspirations; Linking Words
consequently
, many of them opt for career paths that are deemed to have high social value: biology, engineering and medicine. Linking Words
Additionally
, young individuals can benefit from real-life experiences and explore occupational fields that align with their potential career aspirations. Linking Words
This
approach is advantageous as it allows them to save both time and money that might Linking Words
otherwise
be wasted on a degree they do not enjoy.
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On the other hand
, some people view Linking Words
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years as having negative impacts: they are seen as disadvantages and unnecessary. In Thailand, societal expectations Use synonyms
suggests
that taking a Change the verb form
suggest
year
out is not crucial to one’s success. Young students are often perceived as lacking the potential to gain acceptance into university, leading some families to feel shame in society. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, many families believe that taking a Linking Words
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year
is insignificant. They may not know what their child will do during Use synonyms
this
time and do not expect that their child will Linking Words
enroll
in college Change the spelling
enrol
afterward
.
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afterwards
although
some people disagree because they consider that it is meaningless and Linking Words
adverse
an impact on their child, I Add a missing verb
has adverse
belief
taking a Replace the word
believe
year
out is more beneficial because they are spending Use synonyms
times
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time
on
understanding Change preposition
apply
themselve
and trying to make the greatest decision.Correct your spelling
themselves
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The essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear stance on the issue.
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