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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the
emissions
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 per person in four different countries in Europe during a
period
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 of 40 years, between 1967 and 2007.
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 Portugal had the lowest
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 during the whole
period
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, the United Kingdom produced the most
carbon
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dioxide
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 over the displayed time
period
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. 
Although
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 the
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 fell from over 10 metric tonnes in 1967 to about 9 in 2007,
this
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 country had the highest
emissions
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 of all four countries during the whole time
period
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. Even though Sweden showed an increase
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the
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carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 between the
year
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years
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 1967 and 1977, almost reaching the
amount
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 of
emissions
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 of the United Kingdom in 1977, the
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then
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 decreased steeply and ended by 5 metric tonnes in 2007, the same
amount
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 as Portugal.
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,
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 Portugal showed a rise
of
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in
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the
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carbon
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dioxide
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 pollution during
this
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 time, it had the lowest
emissions
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 of all the countries until 2007, when Sweden
equaled
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equalled
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 their
amount
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. Italy
however
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, showed an increase
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in
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the
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emissions
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 as well, reaching an
amount
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 of 7 metric tonnes in 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, carbon, dioxide, period, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steady decline
  • upward trend
  • downward trajectory
  • emissions per person
  • industrialization
  • remarkable reduction
  • sustainable practices
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • urbanization
  • energy consumption
  • fossil fuels
  • average carbon dioxide emissions
  • comparison
  • main features
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