The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
emissions
of
carbon
dioxide
per person in four different countries in Europe during a
period
of 40 years, between 1967 and 2007.
While
Portugal had the lowest
carbon
dioxide
emissions
during the whole
period
, the United Kingdom produced the most
carbon
dioxide
over the displayed time
period
Although
the
carbon
dioxide
emissions
fell from over 10 metric tonnes in 1967 to about 9 in 2007,
this
country had the highest
emissions
of all four countries during the whole time
period
. Even though Sweden showed an increase
of
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carbon
dioxide
emissions
between the
year
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1967 and 1977, almost reaching the
amount
of
emissions
of the United Kingdom in 1977, the
emissions
then
decreased steeply and ended by 5 metric tonnes in 2007, the same
amount
as Portugal.
Although
,
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Portugal showed a rise
of
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carbon
dioxide
pollution during
this
time, it had the lowest
emissions
of all the countries until 2007, when Sweden
equaled
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their
amount
. Italy
however
, showed an increase
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emissions
as well, reaching an
amount
of 7 metric tonnes in 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, carbon, dioxide, period, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • steady decline
  • upward trend
  • downward trajectory
  • emissions per person
  • industrialization
  • remarkable reduction
  • sustainable practices
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • urbanization
  • energy consumption
  • fossil fuels
  • average carbon dioxide emissions
  • comparison
  • main features
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