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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The data illustrates the proportion of central types of fuel produced in the UK in 22
years
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 from 1981 to 2000. From an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 petroleum is the most
favored
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 by the citizens, natural gas witnessed an upward trend,
while
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 coal fluctuated dramatically throughout the period. In 1981, petroleum
as well as
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 coal production started
of
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at around 100 and 80
energy
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units
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. From 1981 to 1987, the trend not only
qualdrupled
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quadrupled
 itself but
also
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 reached a plateau for a few
years
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.
However
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, petroleum production slumped rapidly in five
years
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, once again
started
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 from
crack
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a crack
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 at 100
energy
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units
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. A decade
after
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, the data demonstrates a
stably
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increase
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 level.
On the other hand
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, coal resources experienced a downward oscillation throughout 22
years
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, as
it
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havled
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halved
 sharply at under 40
energy
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units
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 in the third year from 1981. Contrastingly,
eventhough
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even though
 natural gas stayed flat at the early stage, the trend rose steeply from 40 to over
a
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100
energy
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units
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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