What are the advantages and disadvantages of cell phones?

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Today is

modern

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age of science. So

mobile

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the mobile

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phone

blessing

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the blessing

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of modern science and day by day it is

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. Using a mobile

phone

has many disadvantages, but we

khow

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know

it has

lot

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benifits

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benefits

. There are several types of

benifits

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benefits

are including

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with it. One

advantages

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is that the mobile

phone

is a good

time saver

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device

for online shopping. By using the mobile

phone

we can save

our

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valuable

time

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advantage is

that

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online

class

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and

meeting

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meetings

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. Almost everywhere students are using mobile

phone

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phones

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for online

class

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and many employees use

the

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mobile

phone

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phones

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for attending meetings. As a

results

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result

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, they can save their

time

and they can finish their

another

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work.

Last

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advantage is that

using

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the mobile

phone

people can

booking

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their flight and train tickets and so on. On the other side, there are

less

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disadvantages

for

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using

the

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mobile

phone

First

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disadvantage is that the mobile

phone

is a risky

device

for the

children

. Because

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many

children

depend on

this

device

and they play games

modt

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most

of the

time

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this

reason,

children

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eyes can be affected.

In addition

, using the mobile

phone

can affect

students

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students'

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studies. By using the mobile

phone

children

brain

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can be

damage

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And today's

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kids do not want to rat without mobile

phone

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phones

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as a result

, they

became

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depend

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on mobile

phone

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phones

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not

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but not

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least

disadvantage

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the disadvantage

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is that

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mobile

phone

has bad apps which

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dangoures

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dangerous

for every person

specially

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kids. In conclusion,

mobile

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the mobile

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phone

has

less

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fewer

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disadvantages. I strongly believe that it has many advantages and it is

really

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a really

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important

device

in our daily life.

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Pay careful attention to spelling and grammatical accuracy. Small errors such as "khow" instead of "know," and "benifits" instead of "benefits" can be distracting to the reader. Reviewing basic grammar rules and practicing more can help improve in this area.

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You presented multiple advantages and disadvantages of mobile phones, which shows a clear understanding of the topic.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are clear and provide a good framework for the essay.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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What are the advantages and disadvantages of cell phones?

Fully explain your ideas

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe that it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many parts of the world, some famous people are considered ‘role models', and they are having an increasing influence on the young. Does the advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace human in workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have positive or negative impact on society?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?