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The line graph shows the number of cars sold in the USA, Japan, and Germany between 2010 and 2020.

The line graph shows the number of cars sold in the USA, Japan, and Germany between 2010 and 2020.
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The line graph illustrates the number of cars sold in the
USA
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, Japan, and Germany between 2010 and 2020.
Overall
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,
car
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sales
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 in the
USA
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 and Germany increased significantly over the period,
while
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 Japan experienced a gradual decline. The
USA
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 consistently had the highest number of
car
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sales
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,
whereas
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 Japan saw the lowest
sales
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 by the end of the decade. In 2010,
car
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sales
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 in the
USA
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 started at 2
million
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, rising sharply to 4
million
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 by 2020. Germany followed a similar upward trend, though at a slower rate, with
sales
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 increasing from 1.5
million
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 to 3
million
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 during the same period.
In contrast
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, Japan’s
car
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sales
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 decreased steadily from 1.2
million
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 to 800,000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, car, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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