It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

The different opinions
between
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indivuals
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individuals
are
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born with talents and without talents can
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to become good
sports
and
musician
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.
While
some
people
think that
hardwork
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hard work
and training can surpass talented
people
because they deserve to achieve
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from
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what they have done. In my view, talentless
people
who
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harder than
the
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others still lose to talented
people
and only have a small chance to win from them. On the one hand, it is
obvious
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believed that certain individuals
which
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are
bron
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born
with specific
talent
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gave them a natural advantage in
sports
,
musics
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music
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and others.
For example
, a famous football player like Lionel Messi often
get
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the
achievment
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achievements
from the other players even though he trains less than Ronaldo who trains the most frequently among all players.
However
,
Individual
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who have a huge
talent
and
hardworker
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hard work
, making it easier
fo
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them to achieve excellence
due to
natural
talent
can provide a head start and the combination of hard work.
This
situation
describe
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that
talent
is something that
given
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and if we
developed
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it
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will become something very extraordinary result.
On the other hand
, there are those who argue that anyone can be taught to become good at
sports
or music through disciplined practice and proper instruction. They point to the fact that many successful athletes and musicians started with little natural
talent
but worked a bit harder to hone their skills.
For example
, some
sports
players may not have had an immediate advantage but became exceptional through years of dedicated training. In conclusion,
while
some
people
may indeed be born with certain talents, I believe that anyone can be taught to succeed with the right approach and hard work. Both natural ability and training play crucial roles.
However
, perseverance is the most important factor for long-term achievement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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