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Felixstone Construction Maps Between 1967 and 2001

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The two figures show the main changes that
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 place in the
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Felixstone
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Felixstowe
area
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 between 1967 and 2001.
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, it can be seen that the
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Felixstone
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Felixstowe
area
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had
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 become a much more urbanized location with far more urban and recreational
facilities
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. In 1967, the
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Felixstone
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Felixstowe
area
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 had been primarily
a
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large farmland alongside shops and some
facilities
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 for fisheries trading activities,
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 as a fish market, marina, and pier. There had been no significant public or private beach
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, and there had
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 been very little parking
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 near the
hotel
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.
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, by 2001,
Felixstone
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 had experienced a notable transformation in both private and public
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, especially in the beach
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. A large public and private beach had been constructed not far from the
hotel
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 and café.
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, a car park
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 been built to support the
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. Other major buildings that had been added near the shops included apartments, a swimming pool, a
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, and tennis courts.
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introduction conclusion present
Consider expanding your conclusion to provide a more succinct summary of the overall changes and their impact. A brief conclusion encapsulating the main changes can provide closure to your essay.
logical structure
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. For example, you could use more linking phrases to show how the 2001 changes contrast with those from 1967, enhancing overall coherence.
complete response
You provided a detailed and comprehensive response to the task, clearly describing the main changes between 1967 and 2001.
supported main points
Main points are well-supported with specific examples from the maps, which makes your essay informative and precise.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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