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The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph illustrates the demand for
energy
 and the available
energy
 from fossil fuels in freedom-nia over 15 years and expectations for the next five years.
Overall
, the two types of
energy
 flustered over the period. The existing
energy
 started under 4 and will end with a lesser
unit
. The required
energy
begined
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begins
begin
 at 5 and will increase
at the end
. The demand
power
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for power
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 begins with
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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then
 it reached its peak
in
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at
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 about 6 units in 1995
the
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then
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 declined steadily to
unit
 3 in 2000 and it seems it will stay in the same
unit
.
in
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On
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 the other hand,
existing
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the existing
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 power decreased at the beginning of the period from 5 to 2
unit
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units
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in1990
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in 1990
then
 it remained for 5 years.
After
this
, it is increasing dramatically upward.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, unit with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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