•Nowadays, it is getting difficult for people to enjoy their lives in cities. Why do you think this is? What can the government do to make life in cities more enjoyable?
There is no denying the fact
the
living in urban Correct your spelling
that
areas
become less enjoyable last
days. This
essay will discuss two reason
for less pleasant from increasing population in Change to a plural noun
reasons
cities
two environment
pollution. Replace the word
environmental
To begin
with, there are many reason
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reasons
are
to getting difficult for individuals to enjoy their Correct subject-verb agreement
is
live
in Replace the word
lives
cities
,
Firstly
, increasing people in cities
will drive to increasing
rate of rent in Add an article
the increasing
an increasing
residental
and business Correct your spelling
residential
building
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buildings
that
will reflect to increasing of other items and consumption Correct pronoun usage
which
product
in Fix the agreement mistake
products
market
, Add an article
the market
In other words
, will burden people by working more than one job to maintain his
income and consuming more time to reach his Correct pronoun usage
their
work place
Correct your spelling
workplace
due to
the traffice
problem , Correct your spelling
traffic
In
addition
will spend less time with his family or relative that impact the social relations , Add the comma(s)
addition,
Secondly
, growing of industrial areas
close to cities
will increase the inveroment
pollution by Correct your spelling
environment
investment
material
used by factories and smoke rising, it is Add an article
the material
also
possible to say that this
will decrease the green area in cities
like parks and garden, According to
report realsed
by the Pew Correct your spelling
released
realised
Recearch
Center Correct your spelling
Research
suuport
the view,finding that Mumbai city is the first city in the world in the air pollution .
In conclusion Correct your spelling
support
supports
ther
are many Correct your spelling
there
reason
make enjoy in Change to a plural noun
reasons
cities
is difficulte
, it Correct your spelling
difficult
also
true the goverment
are doing many things to find Correct your spelling
government
solution
to Add an article
a solution
the solution
this
issue from support
rural Wrong verb form
supporting
areas
and increase
service in those Wrong verb form
increasing
areas
and improve
infrastructure in Wrong verb form
improving
cities
and add
new rules to Wrong verb form
adding
mange
extend in urban Correct your spelling
manage
areas
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The essay addresses the question with relevant reasons for why city living is less enjoyable and suggests government interventions.
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