You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart depicts the variation of
movie
produced by five countries Fix the agreement mistake
movies
throught
the three-year period from 2007 to 2009.
Correct your spelling
throughout
through
Overall
,it is obvious that country
A had accumulated the largest production of films for the whole time frame.
To begin
with, country
A has demonstarted
insignificant difference in the Correct your spelling
demonstrated
year
2007 and 2008 which Fix the agreement mistake
years
ammounted
to almost 90.Correct your spelling
amounted
However
,a year later the flmmaking
Correct your spelling
filmmaking
decrease
by 10. Wrong verb form
decreased
Moreover
, the
movie production in Correct article usage
apply
country
B is slightly lower than country
A Change preposition
in country
by
25 movies in the first two Change preposition
with
period
.Change to a plural noun
periods
The film
development in Correct article usage
Film
country
B has
reached Unnecessary verb
apply
peak
Add an article
a peak
the peak
at
just below 75 in 2009.Change preposition
of
In addition
, country
C has exemplified a steady increament
in the number of filmmaking from 2007 to 2009.
Other than that, the large proportion of Correct your spelling
increase
cinematogropy
is at the Correct your spelling
cinematography
bigining
and end of the period that accounted for Correct your spelling
beginning
aprproximately
15.Correct your spelling
approximately
Lastly
,throughout the timeframe, the number of screenplays stood at the same amount which below
25 in Add a missing verb
was below
country
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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