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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. n

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. n
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The two maps
gives
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give
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 information about differences
of
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in
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the
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apply
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road
 access in 2007 and in 2010
It is clear that
car
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the car
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park
 and bus stop have differences from that year.
Also
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 the
road
 access to
a
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the
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 hospital changed. After
development
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the development
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 of
city
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the city
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 hospital,
city
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the city
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road
 and
city
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the city
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 hospital
road
unchanged
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were unchanged
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.
Also
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 ring
road
 similar us
befores
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the
city
 hospital.
Then
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The
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car
park
 and bus stop have
big
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a big
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 difference from 2007 . The
car
park
 in 2007 was
to
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too
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 small but in 2010
car
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the car
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park
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was separate
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separate
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separated
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in
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 two sections. They are
public
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a public
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car
park
 and
staff
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a staff
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car
park
 . Like that bus station has increased compared to 2007. In 2010, built
new
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a new
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 thing for
city
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the city
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 hospital. It was roundabout. By
this
 construction, getting in and out of the hospital became easier. And thanks to
this
 there were not many traffic jams in front of the hospital.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, car, park, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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