The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs illustrate the categories on which families in certain countries spent their income in a week.
Overall
, it is certain that food was the most important expenditure in 1968Linking Words
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using the money on leisure became the highest proportion of revenue in 2018.
In the past, fuel and power were slightly more spent by the people. Linking Words
Moreover
, they spend more money on wearing, Linking Words
such
as clothes and shoes, Linking Words
as well as
personal items. Linking Words
However
, a considerable number of the families got interested in decorating their house, rather than their own materials. It is noticeable that the figures for the expense of transportation grew more than in the past, Linking Words
whereas
their food consumption was almost halved. Linking Words
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, people consumed double Linking Words
of
the figure compared to the past, enjoying their leisure life obviously.Change preposition
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