The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts illustrate the number of graduate and postgraduate
students
from The United Kindom who decided not to apply for a full-time job in the year 2008. These Use synonyms
students
have been divided into 4 different categories part-time jobs, voluntary work, Use synonyms
further
study and Unemployment.
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Firstly
, among graduates, the most common career path chosen is to continue to study, which involves almost 30.000 of them. Linking Words
On the other hand
, the least popular is voluntary work with only 3.500 people doing that. Linking Words
In addition
, part-time employees have reached roughly 17.700. Sadly, Linking Words
students
who are unemployed are a little bit more than 16.000.
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Secondly
, regarding postgraduates, Linking Words
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study and volunteering are still the most and least common, with respectively 2.725 and 345 people. Linking Words
However
, Part-time jobs are proportionally more popular in Linking Words
this
group reaching 2.535, only roughly two hundred less than those who focused on studying. Linking Words
Lastly
, Unemployment unfortunately involves over 1.600 Linking Words
students
.Use synonyms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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