The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts illustrate the number of graduate and postgraduate
students
from The United Kindom who decided not to apply for a full-time job in the year 2008. These
students
have been divided into 4 different categories part-time jobs, voluntary work,
further
study and Unemployment.
Firstly
, among graduates, the most common career path chosen is to continue to study, which involves almost 30.000 of them.
On the other hand
, the least popular is voluntary work with only 3.500 people doing that.
In addition
, part-time employees have reached roughly 17.700. Sadly,
students
who are unemployed are a little bit more than 16.000.
Secondly
, regarding postgraduates,
further
study and volunteering are still the most and least common, with respectively 2.725 and 345 people.
However
, Part-time jobs are proportionally more popular in
this
group reaching 2.535, only roughly two hundred less than those who focused on studying.
Lastly
, Unemployment unfortunately involves over 1.600
students
.
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