The given below pie chart shows the cultural and leisure Activities amongst boys’ and girls’. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.write at least 150 words.

The given below pie chart shows the cultural and leisure Activities amongst boys’ and girls’. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.write at least 150 words.
The pie charts provide information about the traditional and free time between two different sex boys and girls.
Overall
, the pie
chars
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charts
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illustrated
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illustrate
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many habits which do it between boys and girls if they have free time which a significant
commne
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comment
commune
is
boy's
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boys'
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culture
played
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playing
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computers
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games
likewise
reading is the lowest activity in the pie chart.
To begin
with boy's cultural and leisure activities it
observed
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that listening to music
is
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was
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the same
percent
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per cent
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in both segments
it
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apply
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was 10%
while
the big differences between
two
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the two
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slid was reading
while
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which
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was 2
percent
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per cent
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in boy's cultural
in contrast
it accounted for
above
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the above
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20 per cent in girls cultural . On
other
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hand
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the highest number of women's cultural activities and leisure was dancing
it
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apply
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made
by
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apply
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27%. The second highest proportion was reading.
in
contrast
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the lowest point was
listing
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listening
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to music .
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