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The given below pie chart shows the cultural and leisure Activities amongst boys’ and girls’. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The given below pie chart shows the cultural and leisure Activities amongst boys’ and girls’. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The pie charts provide information about the traditional and free time between two different sex boys and girls.
Overall
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, the pie
chars
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charts
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illustrated
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illustrate
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 many habits which do it between boys and girls if they have free time which a significant
commne
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comment
commune
 is
boy's
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boys'
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 culture
played
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playing
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computers
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computer
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 games
likewise
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 reading is the lowest activity in the pie chart.
To begin
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 with boy's cultural and leisure activities it
observed
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was observed
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 that listening to music
is
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was
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the same
percent
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per cent
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 in both segments
it
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apply
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was 10%
while
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 the big differences between
two
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the two
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 slid was reading
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while
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which
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 was 2
percent
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per cent
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 in boy's cultural
in contrast
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 it accounted for
above
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the above
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 20 per cent in girls cultural . On
other
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the other
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 hand
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,
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the highest number of women's cultural activities and leisure was dancing
it
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apply
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made
by
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apply
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27%. The second highest proportion was reading.
in
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contrast
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contrast,
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 the lowest point was
listing
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listening
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 to music .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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