In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is widely acknowledged that
people
have to pay for their medical care in many countries, some argue that it supposes to be a free-of-charge
service
provided by the
government
for the sake of their citizen's
health
. The reason why I agree with the latter statement as it can reduce financial burden
especially
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for
low income
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low-income
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group
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will be discussed
further
in
this
essay.
To begin
with, it seems sensible for some to believe that medical care
service
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services
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should be free for their citizen's life.
This
is
possibly
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because the
more
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healthier their
people
are, the better fewer
expense
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expenses
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it is for the
government
to allocate
for
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. Non-communicable diseases
such
as diabetes and hypertension,
for instance
, are the most worrying
health
conditions that
costs
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large
sum
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sums
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for both the patients and
government
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the government
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to
paid
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pay
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for medical treatments
expecially
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especially
drugs and other
intervention
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interventions
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like monitoring sugar
level
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. From my point of view, I could not agree more with the free medical
service
scheme seeing that
this
can benefit
people
tremendously, in terms of equity.
Health
services should not be a
privilage
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privilege
for those who are prosperous. In
this
sense, the
government
should step in and remove
this
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these
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bounderies
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boundaries
between the two groups as both groups of populations drive the nation in some ways. Take Universal
Health
Coverage in Thailand,
for example
; though it is partially free of charge services provided by the
government
, a study shows that it has been helping
thai
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Thai
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citizens to access
this
service
more than in the past. In summary, one's
health
conditions should not considered as
personal
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but rather
national
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a national
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problem that the authorities need to take
this
into
an
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account, I am of the opinion that free
of charge
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healthcare
service
from the
government
not only
it
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improves the quality of life of their
people
but
also
vanishes
this
health
's
privilage
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privilege
from the society.
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Grammar
Improve sentence structure and grammar. For example, instead of 'In this sense, the government should step in and remove this bounderies between the two groups as both groups of populations drive the nation in some ways,' consider 'In this sense, the government should step in and remove the boundaries between the two groups, as citizens from both groups contribute to the nation.'
Examples
Expand on examples and ensure they are more closely related to the argument. For instance, explain how the Universal Health Coverage in Thailand specifically leads to improved access and outcomes.
Position
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and conclusion. For example, 'I agree that medical care should be free, as this would significantly reduce the financial burden on low-income groups and ensure equity in healthcare access.'
Content
The essay effectively discusses both perspectives on the issue of free medical care.
Examples
Good use of examples, such as the Universal Health Coverage in Thailand, helps to support the argument.
Structure
Clear overall structure with a defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal coverage
  • equity
  • fundamental human right
  • out-of-pocket expenses
  • financial hardship
  • preventative measures
  • social contract
  • quality of care
  • high demand
  • limited resources
  • tax implications
  • budget priorities
  • universal healthcare systems
  • public health
  • disease burden
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