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Task 1: (Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: (Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
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The given table compares data about 3 various
factor
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factors
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 that related to the life
experctancy
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expectancy
 and growing communities in 3 several types of
countries
 which had different incomes in 2 years namely, 2002 and 2004.
Overall
, it was important that the
middle income
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countries
 roughly had the best situation
instead
 of the others
and
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.
According to
 the diagram, the
countries
 with high salaries,which reached the main number
as
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of
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 two
time
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times
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 for life expectancy at
the
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birth
 by 78, were not good at
birth
 owing to the fact that their average
birth
 per
women
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woman
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 had the lowest amount
between
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among
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 the others with 1.7;
moreover
,
fashion
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the fashion
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 of the percentage of their
citizens
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citizen's
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 reduced form 2002 by 0.1% and hit 0.7%.
the
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money had the main effect on
the
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life expectancy at
the
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birth
 and its trend
increasing
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 over the period of 2 years owing to the fact that
countries
 with
hight
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high
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 incomes reached
the
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78 and 78.7 in 2002 and 2004 ;
then
middle
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the middle
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 one hit 69.1 in 2002, and its 0.9 increased in 2004;
thereafter
,
lowere
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lower
were
 touched 58.1 and 58.8 in 2002 and 2004. In
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contrast
contrats
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contrast
, money had
revese
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reverse
 fraction
with
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of
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 the average
birth
 per
women
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woman
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 and all women in developed
countries
 did not have a child inasmuch as the
high income
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high-income
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countries
 scored 1.7 in both years;
then
middle
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the middle
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 income, which trend reduced from 2.2 to 2.1, was the second one;
furthermore
,
lowere
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lower
countries
, the first
countries
 in the two times,
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, birth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Population growth rate
  • Average birth per woman
  • Life expectancy at birth
  • Income levels
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Correlations
  • Improvements
  • Declines
  • Statistics
  • Comparisons
  • High-income countries
  • Low-income countries
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