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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

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The supplied two maps depict the same port, and it altered from 2000 to the current time.
Overall
, it is clear from the diagram that Porth Harbour had considerable changes. The most noticeable thing is that the harbour in the present time has facilities for tourists.
Initially
, on the south side of the port, there was a road to the castle with some public beach and
lifeboat
Correct article usage
a lifeboat
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. There was a
car
 park next to the route and the second
car
 park was in front of the main road with some showers and toilets in the west-north area. The private yachts of Marina and fishing boats were near to
car
 parks and the beach. Meanwhile, in the north area of the harbour were located some ferries for passengers and the dock. Turning to the current map, it can be seen that the castle was replaced by the hotel for the visitors and the public beach became private
due to
 the hotel.
In addition
, cafes and shops were located near the lifeboat. On the north side of the map, the quantity of docks and ferries increased.
Moreover
, fishing boats and Marina swapped places, and another restroom was added next to the
car
 park.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly frame the essay. It would be beneficial to include a brief concluding sentence to encapsulate your observations.
clear comprehensive ideas
Try to be more specific when describing changes. For instance, instead of 'considerable changes' and 'facilities for tourists,' you could briefly state which facilities were added.
complete response
Although you summarized the main features well, ensure you don't miss important details, such as changes in the layout of car parks and public amenities.
logical structure
You have logically broken down changes over time into distinct elements, which enhances clarity in your writing.
supported main points
You successfully compared the harbours by highlighting the most noticeable changes and provided specific examples such as the swapping of locations of boats and the addition of a hotel.

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