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You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive. Write a letter to the post manager. In your letter. Give details of the situation Describe the documents Say what action you want the post office to take.

#documents #post #manager #situation #action #office
Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to
show
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 my dissatisfaction
toward
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with
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 your post services. Let me describe the whole situation,
last
 week I sent some important
document
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documents
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 to my sister through your post company but yesterday my sister told me that still
its
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it's
it is
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 not delivered. Even though, I paid extra money for expenses
delivery
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for delivery
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 services
despite
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apply
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that
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we faced
delay
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a delay
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 in document arrival
on
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at
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designated
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the designated
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 location.
This
 parcel is very crucial for me as it
hold
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 all my education documents,
such
 as high school certificates, competition awards,
as well as
 my graduation degrees.
Which my
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 sister plans to use
for
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it for
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 my University entrance examination in Canada,
that is
reason
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the reason
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 I sent these documents to Canada
by
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with
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 the help of your posting services,
unfortunately
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 it's
causes
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causing
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delay
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a delay
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 now.
However
, now I want
that
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apply
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your company must pay
high
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apply
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attention to my document and
provides
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provide
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 me with
exact
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the exact
an exact
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 date of post arrival
otherwise
 I have to send
detailed
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a detailed
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 complaint to higher authority because your negligence can be the reason
of
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for
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 my late application
in
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to
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 top University. I hope you will prioritize my task and reply
me
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to me
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 back with accurate information.
Thankyou
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Arsh deep
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Grammar and Punctuation
In future letters, pay close attention to grammar and punctuation. There are a few errors, such as 'expenses delivery services' which should be 'express delivery services,' and 'Thankyou' which should be 'Thank you.'
Paragraphing
Try to separate different points into distinct paragraphs to improve clarity. For example, describe the situation in one paragraph and the documents in another.
Task Achievement
You described the situation, the documents, and what you want the post office to do very clearly.
Writing Tone
Your tone is appropriate for a formal letter—it is polite but firm, which is suitable for this context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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