The chart below shows what anthropology graduate fron one university did after finishing their undergarduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologyist in work after five years.

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they did a Full-time, Full-time postgrad study, Part-time work, Unemployed, part-time work + postgrad study, or Not known. Most of them,

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, followed by Freelance consultants with 40% and 30% for the Private companies.

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Prison is the common way most countries try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide the public a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (OPINION ESSAY)

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