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The chart below shows what anthropology graduate fron one university did after finishing their undergarduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologyist in work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduate fron one university did after finishing their undergarduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologyist in work after five years.
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pie chart
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illustrate
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Anthropology students
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 after
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graduation, and the tables
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 their salaries after 5
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. For their destination after the university, whether
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they did a Full-time, Full-time postgrad study, Part-time work, Unemployed, part-time work + postgrad study, or Not known. Most of them,
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around 52 percent got
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Full-time work, and the rest were 8, 15, 12, 5,
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percent respectively. In the table
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 the Government sector got the highest rewards with 50%
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getting
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, followed by Freelance consultants with 40% and 30% for the Private companies.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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