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n the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to
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 the advancement of technology,
cars
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 are expected to become
driverless
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,
which
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 only passengers are inside the vehicles without
drivers
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. In my opinion, the advantages of
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 innovation outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand,
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high-tech vehicles may receive some doubt
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about
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if
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 they are 100% safe.
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 kind of new invention is first coming to the public's eyes, it is normal to raise
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,
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 may be the high price of those newly created
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, because the
driverless
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 technique may consist of
long term
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 research, which had
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cost
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 a large
amount
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 of funds.
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, I think these
cars
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 give people more benefits than drawbacks.
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,
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driverless
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 automobiles
have
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 equipped with smart
system
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systems
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 using artificial intelligence, so
it
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they
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provides
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 a well-organized driving pattern, which can solve
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traffic congestion by
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 which road is not so crowded. In
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 way, people can save their time for travelling and commuting.
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, they provide a much safer driving environment, which can reduce
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car accidents.
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, some car accidents may
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due to
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 fatigued and drunk
drivers
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.
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driverless
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cars
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, buses and trucks can prevent those
drivers
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to get
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from getting
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 on the road, it can greatly improve the passengers' safety.
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, though
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driverless
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cars
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 may be more expensive than
the
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 traditional counterparts, they can be economical in some ways. Since there will be no driver
on
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in
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 the car, it can decrease the cost
for
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of
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 hiring bus and truck
drivers
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. In conclusion, though there are some detrimental factors,
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driverless
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vehivles
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vehicles
 may be beneficial to
human
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humans
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 by providing a more convenient and cost-efficient driving environment.

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task response
To enhance your essay, provide more specific examples relevant to your points, such as how AI systems in driverless cars improve safety compared to human drivers.
coherence cohesion
Refine your logical flow and ensure smoother transitions between ideas to enhance coherence. For example, you could segue better from concerns about safety to how technology addresses these concerns.
task response
Your introduction clearly states your opinion and sets up your argument well.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay is clear, with distinct paragraphs for different points, which helps provide coherence.
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