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The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income. Summarise the information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on what people in five different countries chose to do with their discretionary income. Summarise the information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the proportion of discretionary income in India, Finland, Vietnam, Pakistan and Morocco among the three consumption modes. Obviously, each country spends the most. The share of
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 is the lowest in all five countries. Of the five countries, Morocco and India spend significantly more, at 50
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 and 45
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 respectively. In terms of
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, the highest was in Finland, at 14.1
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. In terms of
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, the highest remains Morocco, at nearly 7
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. It can be seen that Pakistan has the lowest proportion of spend and
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, which are close to 25% and above 8% respectively. Vietnam has slightly higher figures in these categories
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 but has the lowest proportion
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 at just 3.1%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discretionary income
  • expenditure
  • spending patterns
  • comparisons
  • outliers
  • cultural influence
  • economic conditions
  • leisure activities
  • trend analysis
  • cost of living
  • socioeconomic factors
  • proportion
  • priority
  • developed countries
  • employment rates
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