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Band 4.5

In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

Nowadays,
younger
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the younger
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generation
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have
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has
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 a difficult time
to communicate
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communicating
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 with
older
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the older
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generation
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.
This
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 problem is not only
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 in some places, but it’s
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 everywhere around the world. The main reason
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this
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 issue
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generation
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the generation
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 gap, and the gap is getting wider because of online
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networks
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 or social media
such
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 as Facebook, Instagram, and Line. These applications
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mobile
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phones
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become
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have become
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 the mainstream activity of almost every
adolescents
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adolescent
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 and younger
adults
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adult
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. It is creating an online trend to spread out with the nature of
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humans
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human
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being
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are
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 likely to
following
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follow
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 each
others
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other
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. Younger
generations
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 are
also
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 able to accept new ideas and
experiences
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experiences,
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combine
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 with the online trending,
it’s
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 creating a gap between the two
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 that
make
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making
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 it harder to
commute
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communicate
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 with the older
people
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are
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do
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 not
understanding
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understand
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 the trend. There
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also
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 an evolution in the languages, the best example would be slang words. These words are usually
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 in
there
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their
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 own
generation
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, so
people
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 find it difficult to communicate with someone who
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 in
different
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a different
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generations
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generation
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. The difficulty in communication in the different
generations
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 can be
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 if
people
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 are willing to listen and try to understand each other more. Younger
people
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 should
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use
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 less
of
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slang and try to
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speak
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 properly with
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older
people
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 to make it easier to communicate.
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While in
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 the other hand, older
people
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trying
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try
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 to understand and learning about
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the younger
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 society
which
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, which
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 is not the same as when there were
grow
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grew
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 up, so that both
generations
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 can understand and communicate with each
others
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other
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 more than they think they ever could. The current era even social
medial
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make
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makes
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 it easier to connect to
people
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 around the world, it
also
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 makes it harder to
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comprehend
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 the real thought process of
people
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 between different
generations
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but
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, but
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 with
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time
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times
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times,
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there
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their
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problem
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problems
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 can be
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solved
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 with an attitude of understanding
in
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apply
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each
others
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other
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so
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, so
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 that both
generations
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 can
connecting
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connect
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 together.

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Task Response
Try to make your introduction clearer and more structured. State your main points explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it with detailed explanations.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use simple and clear language. Avoid grammar errors to improve communication.
Task Response
You clearly identify the problem of communication between generations.
Task Response
You provide solutions that involve both generations listening to each other.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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