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Band 3

In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

In my opinion that young
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 and older
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 couldn't find thier way of communicating, because the gap between thier ages and some of older
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 are conservative, and that makes younger
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 see older
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 as a dinosaur or ignorant, so when two sides get insulted that leads it to be a controversial, and I literally hate
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 because not every young
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 are anarchical and not every seniors or old
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 are dictator, In my opinion the only way to secure
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 problem is the media and awareness of the
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, if we could publish just only the good news and good medias and dump all hate news and fake news out of the way, I belive that's going to make a changes, and younger
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 need to open thier mind to talk with older
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 and older
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 need to understand younger
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's opinion either.

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planning
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about. Then 2 or 3 parts with one idea each. End with a short finish.
coherence
Use easy link words like and, but, also, then to show order and add more ideas.
accuracy
Fix small spell and grammar. Check spell like their and their.
content
Give one or two clear example to back your idea.
content
Say what we can do to fix the problem in steps and who can do them.
idea
You talk about the topic and share your view.
solution
You use a real plan to fix the issue with media.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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