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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Country B's economy in 2005 and 2015 with a forecast for 2025. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Country B's economy in 2005 and 2015 with a forecast for 2025. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart shows us five
diferent
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different
 areas of the economy of country B in
percent
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. In specific time intervals from 2005 to 2015 and including a prediction for the
future
 of 2025. Generally speaking, the area of finance is the biggest area of country Bs economy. In twenty years, finances will grow sharply, and in the
future
 will most likely reach 40
percenr
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per cent
.
By contrast
,
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 system will decrease to its minimum of five
percent
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per cent
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 during these 20 years, and in
future
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future,
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this
 chart will be the smallest. The only stable bar will be tourism, its growth will fall only by 5
percenr
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per cent
 by 2015
,
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 but will remain
falt
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flat
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 in
future
. The food processing and fossil fuels sector will peak in 2015. Food processing will grow by 10
percent
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, but in the
future
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 it will go back down. Fossil fuels have held a high bar since 2005, and in 2015 its percentage will be 30, but
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 by
2025
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2025,
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 it will return to the 2005 level.
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