The chart below gives information about journeys to school by children aged between 11 and 16 in the UK in one year

The chart below gives information about journeys to school by children aged between 11 and 16 in the UK in one year
The depicted bar chart elucidates the way and the accommodation
students
aged 11 to 16 travelled to
school
over a year. From an
overall
perspective, walking and taking the bus is the most picked by
children
with the nearest
distance
from
school
, and
students
whose homes are far away choose to take a bus. The
distance
to
school
maximum of 1mile is mostly done by walking, 90% of
children
choose to walk, but
then
it dropped drastically to 60% when it comes to 1-2
miles
and only 10% of
students
walk
due to
2-5
miles
.
In addition
,
students
whose homes are more than 5
miles
, do not choose to walk.
However
, the amount of
children
who used the bus
initially
started at around 2% and
then
the percentage increased to 10% when the
distance
was up to 1 mile. the percentage increase to 50% and increased drastically to around 68% when it comes to the furthest
distance
.
Conversely
, cars used by
children
with close
distance
to
school
are about 10% and
then
increased by around 23% for 1-2
miles
. And
then
, increased to almost 33% when it comes to distances 2-5
miles
and experienced a decrease of about 10
percent
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at longer distances.
Lastly
, unlike the other transportation, the bicycle did not have a very clear percentage change over the entire
distance
.
Students
chose to ride a bike under 7
percent
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per cent
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with a home
distance
of under 1-5
miles
.
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