The chart below gives information about journeys to school by children aged between 11 and 16 in the UK in one year

The chart below gives information about journeys to school by children aged between 11 and 16 in the UK in one year
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The depicted bar chart elucidates the way and the accommodation
students
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aged 11 to 16 travelled to
school
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over a year. From an
overall
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perspective, walking and taking the bus is the most picked by
children
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with the nearest
distance
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from
school
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, and
students
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whose homes are far away choose to take a bus. The
distance
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to
school
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maximum of 1mile is mostly done by walking, 90% of
children
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choose to walk, but
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it dropped drastically to 60% when it comes to 1-2
miles
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and only 10% of
students
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walk
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2-5
miles
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.
In addition
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,
students
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whose homes are more than 5
miles
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, do not choose to walk.
However
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, the amount of
children
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who used the bus
initially
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started at around 2% and
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the percentage increased to 10% when the
distance
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was up to 1 mile. the percentage increase to 50% and increased drastically to around 68% when it comes to the furthest
distance
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.
Conversely
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, cars used by
children
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with close
distance
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to
school
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are about 10% and
then
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increased by around 23% for 1-2
miles
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. And
then
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, increased to almost 33% when it comes to distances 2-5
miles
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and experienced a decrease of about 10
percent
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per cent
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at longer distances.
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, unlike the other transportation, the bicycle did not have a very clear percentage change over the entire
distance
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.
Students
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chose to ride a bike under 7
percent
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per cent
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with a home
distance
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of under 1-5
miles
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, school, children, distance, miles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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