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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collect ( as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collect ( as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005
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The chart shows details about collected
tax
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 in five
countries
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such
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 as
Sweden
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,
USA
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the USA
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,
Korea
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,Japan and Turkey for four years between 1975 and 2005.
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,it is
the
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clear that both
Sweden
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 and the USA showed a consistent increase in
tax
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 collection,starting from lower amounts and reaching their peak over the years.
Firstly
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,in 1975
Sweden
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expierenced
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experienced
46 % of
tax
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,
while
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 in
USA
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the USA
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 less than about 25.1 %.
Adittionally
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Additionally
Korea
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 and Japan raised respectively.
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 Turkey collected amount of
tax
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 than those two
countries
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. In 1985,
Korea
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 increased up to 27% and
also
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Sweden
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 and Japan raised equally with 1%.But Turkey lost their percentage
about
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by about
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 15%. In 1995, four
countries
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 increased
respectevely
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respectively
whithout
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without
Korea
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.Because
this
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 country lost their percentage
about
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by about
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 26%. When it comes to 2005, five
countries
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 developed
respectivaly
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respectively
 day by day and improved their collected amount of
tax
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tax, countries, sweden, korea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • tax collection
  • percentage (%)
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • increase/decrease
  • economic impact
  • tax rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data interpretation
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