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The table gives information about department and online stores in Australia in 2011.

The table gives information about department and online stores in Australia in 2011.
#information #department #stores #australia
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The table chart illustrates information about the amount of
department
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 and online
shops
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 in Australia in 2011.
Overall
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, the most noticeable index here is sales Revenue. The growth of both
shops
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 is given by
percentage
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. More people prefer to do business
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online. More precisely, 67 and approximately 5 times more than
this
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 is the amount of
department
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 and online
stores
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 respectively. There is no big difference in number, between the
stores
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 in profit. Both of them have around 830
stores
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. The number of
department
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stores
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 with a sales revenue is exactly 12700.
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, the number of online
stores
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 with sales revenue is 700
shops
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 more than
department
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stores
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.
Finally
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, the
last
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 one is the
percentage
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 of growth of both indexes. In
this
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 section, we can see again the previous trend. Online
stores
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 have 2% more than online
shops
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. The
percentage
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 of increase in
department
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stores
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 is 4%. Analogically the
percentage
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 of online
stores
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 is 6%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words department, shops, percentage, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revenue
  • customer satisfaction
  • product range
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • observable trends
  • shopping habits
  • preferences
  • traditional department stores
  • online shopping
  • significant differences
  • comparison
  • examination
  • analysis
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