The table gives information about department and online stores in Australia in 2011.
The table chart illustrates information about the amount of
department
and online shops
in Australia in 2011.
Overall
, the most noticeable index here is sales Revenue. The growth of both shops
is given by percentage
.
More people prefer to do business as
online. More precisely, 67 and approximately 5 times more than Change preposition
apply
this
is the amount of department
and online stores
respectively. There is no big difference in number, between the stores
in profit. Both of them have around 830 stores
.
The number of department
stores
with a sales revenue is exactly 12700. Furthermore
, the number of online stores
with sales revenue is 700 shops
more than department
stores
. Finally
, the last
one is the percentage
of growth of both indexes. In this
section, we can see again the previous trend. Online stores
have 2% more than online shops
. The percentage
of increase in department
stores
is 4%. Analogically the percentage
of online stores
is 6%.Submitted by bizhanalikhan6 on
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