News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspaper. What focus do you think influence these decisions? Do we become to used to bad news, and would it be better more good news was reported?

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Media outlets editors decide what to send on-air on television and what to print in newspapers.
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, their decisions are influenced by their sponsors and donors,
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better to watch rewarding
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on TV and read the best science discoveries in newspapers.
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channel decisions are always dictated by someone in the hierarchy of their sponsor echelons. Wherein, their donors always push them to broadcast their agenda to people around the world,
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essay talks about the most popular outlets,
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have millions of subscribers around the globe,
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send millions of newspapers for them to read, and have directly influenced their minds in a good way or in a bad way.
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, a number of Western media,
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as CNN, NBC, ABC and FOX
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Islamophobia propaganda under the finance of their racist donors. It would be fantastic for people to hear great
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discoveries on TV and read appealing
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about sports rather than sad and horrific
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.
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, the minds of humans are adoptable if they hear, watch, and read rewarding
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. They may feel optimistic about the future, and their entire body will become energized with full potential to be a better human in society. And
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, if they hear bad
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, they may feel anxious, and their minds will completely freeze.
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, when one hears that in some part of the
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a conflict begins and
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will eventually lead to
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will completely lose hope for the future, which is detrimental
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all humans. In conclusion, many of the media are sponsored by tycoons, and they are the ones who dictate what
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be sent on-air on TV, on the radio, and printed on paper.
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essay believes it would be in the fever of all humanity to hear joyful
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rather than terrible reports,
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happy
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promotes oxytocin hormones and helps humans live longer.
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