News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspaper. What focus do you think influence these decisions? Do we become to used to bad news, and would it be better more good news was reported?
Media outlets editors decide what to send on-air on television and what to print in newspapers.
However
, their decisions are influenced by their sponsors and donors, although
it would much
better to watch rewarding Add a missing verb
be much
news
on TV and read the best science discoveries in newspapers.
News
channel decisions are always dictated by someone in the hierarchy of their sponsor echelons. Wherein, their donors always push them to broadcast their agenda to people around the world, although
this
essay talks about the most popular outlets, where
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which
they
have millions of subscribers around the globe, Correct pronoun usage
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where
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they
send millions of newspapers for them to read, and have directly influenced their minds in a good way or in a bad way. Correct pronoun usage
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For example
, a number of Western media, such
as CNN, NBC, ABC and FOX News
, propagates
Islamophobia propaganda under the finance of their racist donors.
It would be fantastic for people to hear great Correct subject-verb agreement
propagate
news
about science
discoveries on TV and read appealing Replace the word
scientific
news
about sports rather than sad and horrific news
. However
, the minds of humans are adoptable if they hear, watch, and read rewarding news
. They may feel optimistic about the future, and their entire body will become energized with full potential to be a better human in society. And on the other hand
, if they hear bad news
, they may feel anxious, and their minds will completely freeze. For instance
, when one hears that in some part of the world
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world,
it
will eventually lead to Correct pronoun usage
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war-world
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World
they
will completely lose hope for the future, which is detrimental Correct pronoun usage
one
for
all humans.
In conclusion, many of the media are sponsored by tycoons, and they are the ones who dictate what Change preposition
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to
be sent on-air on TV, on the radio, and printed on paper. Add a missing verb
is to
This
essay believes it would be in the fever of all humanity to hear joyful news
rather than terrible reports, whereas
happy news
promotes oxytocin hormones and helps humans live longer.Submitted by am.edrees on
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